3 sad poems thought ya’ll might like share your opinons?
IM TOO BIG TO CRY
I never stopped to realize
How lonely I would be
I never thought the day would come
When you’d grow tired of me
Your voice was never sweeter
Than the day you said goodbye
You’ll never know how much it hurt
Because I’m too big to cry
If I knew then what I know now
You’d still be kissing me
Instead there’s someone else’s lips
Where mine used to be
I say hello and wish you well
Each time I pass you by
But you’ll never know how much it hurt
Because I’m too big to cry
You never looked so wonderful
As the day you walked away
I used to say, "I love you"
But that I could not say
I can’t forget you darlin’
No matter how much I try
You’ll never know how much it hurt
Because I’m too big to cry
MY LOSS OF INNOCENCE
When we first met I made you promise
you would never leave,
then I told you of the demons,
and how they made me bleed.
I made you promise crazy things,
but your words were not enough.
I couldn’t believe you loved me
I thought to love me was too tough.
When I cry about my past
and say that I’m ashamed
I know I am the only one
who is to be blamed.
Then you crawl in bed beside me
and say that it’s ok-
so I cry for my loss of innocence
and the things I gave away.
When I can’t sleep through the night,
when I toss and turn in bed,
you wrap your arms around me
and chase the demons from my head.
You say don’t talk about the past
you tell me that it’s gone,
you say since we’re together now
it’s time that I move on,
you say that I’m your angel
but if you only knew
the kind of thoughts I think
and what I used to do.
You tell me it doesn’t matter
and that you love me anyway-
so I cry for my loss of innocence
and the things I gave away.
They said that’s how they liked it
when I dragged my nails across their backs,
but now you hold my hand in yours
and tell me to relax,
you say that this is making love
and this is the better way-
so I cry for my loss of innocence
and the things I gave away.
I never felt a thing
before you touched my heart
and when you touched my body,
I thought I’d fall apart.
When you kiss my lips,
I feel you deep within my soul
then you wrap your arms around me
and say you’ll never let me go.
When I tremble at your tenderness
and melt in your arms,
I know you really love me,
and you’ll keep me safe from harm
you know I’ve never loved
or been loved in any kind of way-
so I cry for my loss of innocence
and the things I gave away.
TASTING RAINDROPS
Looking in your eyes
I feel myself falling in love with you
You said I love you
And I said it too
We went to our very own special spot
For no real reason at all
We sat and talked and looked at one another
And then the rain began to fall
We could have left just as quick as we came
But no, you wanted to stay in the rain
You asked me a question I�ll never forget
Have you ever tasted the raindrops?
I looked at you funny and you gave me a sigh
The cutest look, as I wondered, why?
Why, did you ask me to taste the rain?
Well, what did have to loose or gain?
I watched you with a careful eye
And did the same as you
You were looking up at the cloudy sky
But my eyes were stuck on you like glue
I lifted my head to look at the sky
And closed my eyes really tight
Just as I thought I�d caught a raindrop
You suddenly held me tight
I opened my eyes with slight alarm
As you kissed me soft and sweet
I remember that kiss like it was yesterday
I still feel those raindrops on my cheek
I tasted the raindrops like I never had before
It was worth every second of bliss
Every time I think of that moment
I think of my raindrop kiss
We sat close together on that one special rock
And we held each other tight
Then almost as suddenly as it came
The sun came out from beneath the rain
The most beautiful colors I�ve ever seen
Came out on the western sky
The sun was setting and the moment was perfect
More than any money could buy
As the sun slowly set and the sky lit up
You began carving our names in our special rock
I told you I would never forget this moment
In my heart this memory is locked
As our names were finished and permanently engraved
We watched the sun finish its day
We slowly got up to leave this place
Which was a year ago this May
I haven�t been to that spot in a year
Where did all the time go?
I will visit this place alone this time
And I will finally have to let go
This memory will be in my heart forever
But you will not remain in my mind
I don�t know if that love, will be seen again
For that love I cannot find
I will go to this spot as we promised we would
But you will not be there this time
Why is it that you can�t keep your promise?
I know that I�m keeping mine
Never again will I taste the raindrops
The way I did with you
And when I go to this spot again
I will say goodbye to you.
Tags: angel, crazy things, darlin, demons, lips, loss of innocence, making love, nails, Opinons, sad poems, sleep, sweeter than the day, Voice Amp
These are, like, really pretty.
Deep too.
They were all beautiful. I like Tasting Raindrops the best because I can relate to it the best. What inspired you to write these lovely poems? They have heart and soul in them. Keep writing.
Good Luck &
Blessed Be
pretty good, but personally I dont prefer poems. would you try to be quite optimistic, don you?
These were very good and beautiful ! VERY TOUCHING ,
you can tell it came from the heart! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!
These are some of the best poems I’ve read in a long time.
Your very talented. Keep it up!!
Hope to read more soon.
Wow, I must say, you go, and keep writing. These poems are going in a long way of fortune! You’ve got talent! The way the words were written, it’s as if it’s reality!
Deep and beautiful poems such as this can only come from someone who truly has a beautiful soul, you have so much talent and you write with such beauty. Take it from me though ^_^ you should cheer up a little bit, i know a lot of these poems are how you feel but hey, theres no point in being sad in life is there
anyway your a great person with great talent, the only problem is you fall asleep too early lol you know what im talkin about (sorta inside joke lol) ^_^ anyway good job on these
Most of what is offered in YA as poetry is, though often heartfelt and deeply honest, of little poetic merit, and sometimes with little to distinguish it from mere doggerel.
This is rather better. It has a long way to go before it’s poetry, but for once, it’s on the right road. Many of the other offerings on YA fail because, technique apart, they have little in the way of a ‘hook’ for the reader to identify with, even though, paradoxically, they tend to be about the common topics such as loss, absence, unrequited love, requited love, and so on. Others fail because they don’t tell a cohesive story, and fall into vagueness and obscureness, trying over-earnestly to adopt quasi-poetic vocabulary and idioms. Others have little sense of rhythm, metre, colour, or style. This, for once, is different.
The ache in ‘My Loss of Innocence’ is evident, and quite poignant, and this comes through despite, not because of, the form used. As a poem, it has many rough edges and needs refinement, but it has enough content and imagery to be worth working on.
Some of the language is awkwardly unsubtle: "They said that’s how they liked it / when I dragged my nails across their backs", though at least the meaning is clear, that of a woman’s regret that her first true love was not her first. Yet some of the rhythms are almost exquisite:
"so I cry for my loss of innocence
and the things I gave away"
Your work would benefit from a tad more editorial ruthlessness, and checking over your rimes schemes, some of which are assonances — I don’t think assonances work well when accompanied by true rimes, they make it look and sound like the writer couldn’t find the proper rime, or worse, didn’t know the difference. There is a genuinely pleasing theme in Tasting Raindrops, though once again, it needs revision and ruthless editing. Some of these verses are very suited indeed to being song lyrics.
Genuinely good and thoughtful work here. I am impressed.