What do you think of these (if you do not like sad poems, don’t read)?
have no titles, so i’ll just number them for your convenience
1:
People see me and say emo
People meet me and say fine
People talk to me and say good person
People know me and I say about time
People see me and say emo
So what, maybe I am
I like dark colors, I cry, I cut
But they don’t know me, so I tell them shut up
People meet me and say fine
Well, I try to cover the truth
No one sees the soul inside,
The pain and torment that I hide
People talk to me and say good person
Well, I try my best to please
I may be a good person
But these people still don’t know me
People know me and I say about time
All I ask is listen and talk,
Not just to speak and hear
Do this, and gain respect, and you will always have a friend in me.
2)
Don’t label me I say
By the color of my skin
By the clothes that I wear
Or what you label my kin
I wish not to be known
As emo goth or punk
As scene prep or nerd
But as the individual I am
I am an individual
A girl who’s one in a million
A single person in a crowd
I am unique, if you must label, label me as such
3) (please note that this one is relatively sad, and is more "free-form" poetry)
A quite cemetery nestled in the woods
The shadow of a gothic church covers people in darkness
Surrounding the casket young and old, dressed in black, and coated in sorrow
Slowly lowered into the ground, my friends cry even more
Tears are shed as soil covers the casket and flowers are put on top
People slowly leave, and when all are gone, one last person steps out of the shadows, bends down and cries
The one I loved, and lost to leave
He puts a black rose on my grave and takes out a blade
He said we would never part, I wish he lied
Thanks for reading, and critisize as much as needed, I just write poetry as a kind of "therapy" so to speak, but I want to improve, so any comments, even if you think they are horrible because of the writing, feel free to tell me, to be honest, I don’t like them much myself, but want to know what you think.
sorry they are so long!
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i honestly think that they are good. But as i was reading i noticed that by ur poetry that maybe people might lable you nad u find that no matter who u are u r still a single person. I think that ……. you have maybe alot of feelings inside of you or maybe u just like rightin g that stuff but they r good. The last one i like how u said he puts a black rose on my grave and takes out a blade he said we would never part, i wish he lied.
I like that it reminds me of twilight. your good
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I like them all very much, you’re talented
Poem One
I loved the rhthym of the first poem, real nice, but you kiinda lost me at the end, the ending could’ve been much more better, but it was alright.
Poem Two
Was alright, it had a feeling to it but not much as a rhtyhm
Poem Three
It didn’t have a rhythm also but it most def. painted a picture in my head. Very good though, very dark but that’s good. I like poems like that =]
Keep writing and posting.
Ps. Long poems are good as long as they are, well, good lol.
I really liked them, keep it up! just remember the more you write the better they are(though they are good)