help me finish this sad love poem?
August 18th, 2009 by admin | Filed in Getting Back Together
the first time he ever looked into my eyes
something told me his smile was full of lies
my mind said "this is to good to be true"
while my lips whispered "i love you too"
i wanted to turn and just run away
but the way he held me urged me to stay.
he kissed me softly to see how i would react
and suprisingly, i felt myself kiss him back
the way he caressed me brought shivers to my spine
i reluctuntly agreed when he asked to be mine
***AFTER WE KISSED HE TOOK ADVANTAGE OF ME FOR MONTHS TO COME AND I WAS TO BLINDED BY "LOVE" TO SEE. NOW I’M FREE BUT STILL IN PAIN*** HELP
MY SUGGESTED ENDING:
The pain lingers, but with a lesson to never be
Involved with someone who is "prettier" than me.
His charming smile along with a twinkle in his eyes
Misled me to love him, despite his obvious disguise.
But now Love’s blinders have been removed to reveal
Whomever I choose next to share my life be real,
And love me back the way I love trustingly
Lasting a lifetime for all eternity …
COMPOSED BY PUNNY POETRESS 04-18-09
I cant help lengthen it you should do that yourself but instead of "i felt myself kiss him back" i think "i felt myself kissing back" sounds better.
I’d have to think a little bit on how to help u with it, but yea u can add my poem on ur myspace. U should add me on there…I’m always looking for new friends. (If you add me I’ll have the rest of ur poem and u can tell me what you think of my ending…kk???